For this being a new type of style of poetry for you tis was well written.
There is always room for improvement but that is for even the greatest. I think if this is new type for you then you did an awesome job. I also like to challenge myself to write apoem in a differnet style then my norm just for the challenge!! Good work keep it up...check out some of ma poems if you get a chance...i would luv to hear what you thik...honestly think...thanks and again classic write.

Wow this one has some deep meaning and i like it! well comment my new poem please.

Hey this is very good. I like how you are reflecting the internal pain felt, and comparing it to an inamament object. Thats awesome:).. Keep writing!

You've started very well your new type of writing. However there is of course always room to improve, as all of us.I noticed one spelling mistake but otherwise flawless.
Take care hun thanx for the comment
oxox

I like it and im sorry that you are going throguh the same thing i am. I really like it you speak the truth. Thanks for the comment.

Gosh it's so bittered,, but i can imagine how you must have felt that exact moment .. you're a great writer kallie, love You Xx

Thanks for the comment...this is really good for being a new type of poem..I like it!

Hey hun this was a really good i can feel the pain that you have expressed really nice love your writting. take care always xoxo Rach

Hey I thought that was pretty true, when ever stuff happens it hits hard and it stays in you so you trapped that in your poem pretty well

Nice metaphor connectiont to acid, i like
thanks for rating my poem
if you have time, pease read my new one, Impulse

Gosh, that was so good!!
makes me wanna comfort you ^^ dunno why
Xx missed You

I love the way you wrote this poem with!
the poem is very simple and enjoyable to read =)
Keep it up
and thanks so much for your comment, thou my reply is V late :S sorry exams were kinda stressing!

Keep it up
Lov
NemO xxxxxxxx

I think that this was very well writen. i uderstand this poem completely it is so much like what me and my two friends ae going thourgh write now i loved it