by ~~Lindsay Woods~~ Feb 2, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
I stand here all alone as my friends watch me, |
by Juls
Great work...loved it |
by Emma
Awe how sad. good tho. |
by J Lau
Nice write. Short and sweet. If I may suggest, move the "as my friends watch me," to a new line so that it makes more overall impact on the poem, stressing that you're "Standing here all alone"... also, if you move "in a pale white gown?" to a new line, it'll keep the flow going and be more consistent throughout the poem. Just my thoughts. Great write though! Keep writing. 5/5 |
KEw Kew ... one of ur best definitly |
Excellent poem!!! |