Wow, that was well... confusing. I see how you blended a sort of childhood perspective with the sort of mess and destruction of the world they live in/ are going to grow up to? Its a really weird contrast but taking a sort of childhood comparison is a good idea. And the way you sort of merge the childhood games with what they reflect in the real world is good to. It sort of creates flashbacks in the mind of the child and then the horror. Its really odd, and I cant help but like it.

Wonderful write Drew, just exquisite

Wow great job

tabby

It's about war, and i love the contrast between using the games which are soo childish against something so very harsh and "grown up"

at first i didn't like the way you used all the games so close togather in each stanza but after reading it all i liked the way it all closed togather in an unconsious effort

the only advice i could give is to maybe space out the words( game names) more so that they don't feel like they become over used but
over all
it's a really good poem : )

I thought Id read this before! And I had....hmm lets see what did I say last time...lol well I still agree with that but now when I read it its not as confusing. Its a real expression of emotion this piece, and I can see why you would class it in your favourites. Definitely a real release of built up tension with beautiful metaphors and exquisite imagery. It has that sort of blurred effect where you switch from each topic to the next soo quickly. The only problem with that is it makes me read the piece too quickly and puts waaayy too much in my head at once. But its also what draws me to your work, and dammit the addiction is still there. But I think I also like to savour your works and read and digest them one at a time. Thanks soo much for all your comments and I hate to post it on here as I hate it when people say that on their comments of my work but what the heck. Your critique really helps sometimes and I appreciate it alot.