The Heartbreaker

Read my previous comment...lol

Heya...thank you for your comment! it was sweet!
I love your writing! Your quotes are great, I loved the one over the law that should make the guy like us like we do! ^^ Keep up the good work and let me tell you that that guy is a moron for not seeing what your worth!

Ohhh sad!!!!!!!! I know how it feels to love someone like that, in fact that's how it is right now. I hope that everythings okay... hopefully you find someone better. Keep up the awesome writing though! xoxo

^I disagree, I think that "make it" and "break it" are great rhymes. However, I thought some of the rhyming seemed somewhat forced. Not as smooth as it could have been, but the meaning shined through (you go girl! lol). Not bad.
~Jaime

I really like this poem, it has a really good flow and format, it's not all jumbled, and the rhymes are good, except it and it don't rhyme. Lol.

Anyways, I like this poem, but I couldn't take it seriously, because, a lot of the words, (mainly the rhyming ones) didn't seem to have enough power, to bring me into that sub-concious state that happens to me, when I am reading a poem.

I really like this poem though.

Keep up the good work and always strive to do better.