Godo one...i need you to get people to check otu my stuff thnxs

LISSA

Very creative and imaginative

Hey it's me! :D Good poem! I really love your work. Keep at it! :D

I'm with !Britt! here. The way you have structured the use of "tions" is quite disruptive to the flow. At first I wasn't sure why it didn't work for me, but then I read her comment and read it out loud, and there it was. It's quite an interesting way of putting a poem together, but it just doesn't quite work.