You have a style that works well for you, and you are good at implanting emotions and theme into your writing. The only slight turn off is how your lines go all over the place, and are not really in a set form. They don't have to be, I am all for free form, but if you try to put some kind of pattern into you writing it's appearance on the page can add to the power of your poem. Nice job hun!

-Tainted Mikochan