by Danielle Feb 7, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
Being with-out you is not an option for me. I wont give up on you, until you see. How can things be so mest up, how did we even get to this point? We were once so happy and in love, all we needed was each other and now you love someone else and depend on her. It's hard and it breaks my heart every day, because since you, i have lost my way. You complete me and make me feel whole, your my everything, I love you.. i can feel it in my soul. The pain eventually will go away but my love for you will stay with me for each and every passing day. |
That was a verry good poem.. same as wat cuddles said tho it'd be better in like poem form rather then paragraph ... but other then that ur a great writer... |
by Cuddles
I think your poems are pretty good, actually. If you don't mind constructive criticism, and you can't even call it criticism, it might be a little easier to get the meaning of the poem if it wasn't in paragraph form. But you're good. Keep it up. |