I think your poems are pretty good, actually. If you don't mind constructive criticism, and you can't even call it criticism, it might be a little easier to get the meaning of the poem if it wasn't in paragraph form. But you're good. Keep it up.

That was a verry good poem.. same as wat cuddles said tho it'd be better in like poem form rather then paragraph ... but other then that ur a great writer...

xox pixie