It was good. I liked the message it had. Its good to write about a postive messgae. The only issue with it was the rhyming flow. Some lines rymed in a pattern others didnt. But either way it has alot of potential.

Hewwo.
Wow, your title put me into song..tehe. Sorry bout that.

Well I enjoyed this poem, I liked the diffrent flows..the change of rhytm in your stnazas..twas a niice lil touch.

Well done on this, *wonders away singing :]*

Keep it up.x

Hey, is Josh, the one who wrote about poop. Just to let you know, I wrote that in 2 secondes just for fun, i even forgot I put that on there. I Actually have written "real" poems. To find them under the search poems thing type this exactly (Joshua) and thean go to the 4 page and read one called the anomonous lover and the ones after. Comment on them after so I know you read them.

Thanks a lot.