Might I suggest that you try writing other types of poems other than rhyming ones? Just a suggestion. Try looking at the type I write or the people who have commented on mine write :) It's really hard to write rhyming poems, I know!! I'm terrible at it.

Wow, this is a really funny poem. i agree with starryoceanights tho, u dont have to but you should extend your bioundries and experiment u may fdind some other type of writting u enjoy more. oh and bout the poem, i dont no y i wrote it or where it came from all i no is that it was my feeling and i was so sad that i was crying when i wrote it so it =must have had something to do with my emotions. any way, take care and gd luck with your poetry.