I WROTE THIS POEM ABOUT MY SISTER

Great poem, but it seemed like you were trying to write a sonnet in the beginning with the 9,9,9,9 in the first stanza then 9,10,9,9 in the second, then 9,9,11,11 in the third and 10,11,10,10 then 11,11 in the last. it made it a lil choppy but i still liked the whoe theme and the words chosen to express lifes motions. good poem overall.

I had to read it a couple of times and was a little lost but thats probably just from my young age. and lack of vocab and history in some parts

~Retniapdoolb~