by Patrick Feb 9, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
This fire for you burns through midnights power as all of time stops for a single eternal hour. Retaining the purest form of sadness, a spark of light flickers in the evening wind. |
by kei
Why is it that everyone tries to capture love in a message? you seem to be one of the few who actually gets it |
by Mel
The final 'thee' seems out of sorts with the rest of the poems language. 'You' would have been surfice. |
by Kaylee
The word choice is really good and deep as well as emotional. It does present a fantastic vivid image. The only things I would suggest might be to only stick to this format if you like it, for me it was a bit hard as I'm not a fan of it. Also maybe take out a word here and there such as: |
by amelia
Beautiful...enticing... touchin & deep |
It's good, not into it. But still good. |