by ♥CRIMSONxX♥ Feb 11, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
One day he might realize |
by Debbie
I adore this piece. It was, in fact, written and presented rather well and sound. The overall diction and flow of words were terrific. As a result, on the whole, I give you my props for writing such a fantastic and bittersweet love poem. =] |
by Colby
Hey great poem! I feel the same way about someone right now. |
by Natalie84
In the first stanza -- the line seems so forced like you just said that so the last line would sound similar to the second. I don't think it worked very well in this particular case. Saying your heart is thin is not really saying much. |
by Natalie84
Constructive criticism? How about MY OPINION?! LOL |
Hey so far so good keep up the good work once your finnished let me know cause i want to know how it ends!!!! |