Holy smokes...this poem is amazing... I don't even know what to say! The only advice I have is to edit "oretend" to pretend. Just a typo! =) This poem is very good hun, you never cease to amaze me!

Wow is all I can say. Chelsey you know you write kick ass poems and I love them all, it's about time we wrote one together again.
~love your big sis April