Oh my God, Bill! This was simply amazing, I love it! The story, the flow, the intensity, then the perfect ending! Really awesome poem!

Okay wow this is like wow ... I dunno what it is... gr8 !!! I loved it I love the story the ending the beginning the suspense the everything.. it was really hot!!! You did really good...

::MELI::

That was awesome! Loved the ending so much! This poem as just so intense and amazing!

The blood! The fangs! vampire loving! or not.

anyway, it kept me riveted throughout, and it deserves the praise it's getting

well done and hope you are enjoying your hog.

Dark and thrilling! Wonderful write Bill :)

Woah! So duz this mean the girl was a vampire or sumfink? =P
Naah i lyk this itz pretty cool!!
4/5
Well done!!

Wow bill!!! that was simply amazin, and written brilliantly.. i love it.. plz check out sum of mine and comment, wud luv 2 hear your opinion!!!! Neyney

Cool poem...i like it

Wow...good poem...i really enjoyed reading it :]

My Bloody Valentine's Day poem beats yours :P hehhe jk I actually liked this one better than mine. Since you didn't have to restrict your words like I did for that challenge. I should write another one, but that dreadful day is over. Good poem Bill, you are damn good.

Wow. breathtaking. Dark, twisted, sick, and beautiful. Amazing. Truly.

Good job man i almost went into tears

WOW im lyk speechless...this poem was amazing...this deserves a 10\10 lol...keep it up...luv dia mwaz xoxo

Thats soo deep. good poem

It was beautiful and dark at the same time; perfect ending too. I loved it!

That was an awsome poem. I liked the twist at the end. I didn't see that coming at all. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Wow, that poem was . . . at first confusing and then I think I kind of got it. Either way you had powerful discriptions, even if my punny mind couldn't follow your train of thought all the way.

_Tainted Mikochan