I don't know your relationship with the person, but say it's someone you like and the feeling is mutual. Well, then I suggest that the ending is negative and would possibly make the person feel bad, like they should try harder to be there for you. But, on the other foot, if it's for someone who doesn't really know you like them and rarely acknowledge(sp?) you, then yes, it's perfect. I hope you are well, you had me rather depressed over your last poem and your absence. Take care, my love.

Much love,
Mortie.x.

Very nice poem. I loved the ending. It seems to me you have lost yourself in this love... find yourself first, only then love will find you. Great job. 5/5