Well the title is actually ok, it seems like the holocaust. also it seems a bit scattered, is there any way you can pull it all in? it's fair though.

Good poem and dont waste yur time on crimson room two i am completely redoing it anyhow i gave this one a 4/5

I Liked it.. for the name maybe something like "hell".. thats just what it reminds me of.. that and the holocaust.. anyways it was really great kinda disturbing but nice.. 5/5

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