Comments : Be my Valentine??

  • 18 years ago

    by Gretchen

    HAHAHA good job I liked the flow and the rhyming

  • 18 years ago

    by dijah

    That was a great poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    You definitely have a way with rhyming.

    Though your poems are usually rhyming like so:

    A
    A
    B
    B
    C
    C
    D
    D

    I usually prefer those that rhymes like:

    A
    B
    A
    B
    C
    D
    C
    D

    Maybe you should write one like so, just a suggestion.

    About the poem itself, I love it. Exacept for the last sentence in the last stanza.

    "Or was it made for me and you?"

    I liked how you ended it, but maybe it's the way you worded it with the "Or" that threw me off.

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 17 years ago

    by Twisted By You

    Its sweet and really good