Hidden feelings

by simplysarah   Feb 14, 2006


Nobody knows how i feel,
there are few to whom i can reveal.
the hurt i go through without people knowing.
everyday the pain keeps growing.
my tears are flowing
as i sit on my own
some where quite in my home.
i long to scream, shout and die.
but dare not so i weep and cry.
could my heart ever repair?
as i cry with despair
anger makes me pull my hair.
why is life so unfair?
no one seems to care.
now i know no one cares,
because no ones ever here.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kim

    The poem has a lot of emotion in it and can pull the reader in. The only thing I found with it was the rhyming, there was no pattern and when you rhymed, repair, despair, hair, unfair, care and care together it kind of through me off. My other suggestion would be "quite" should be "quiet" butI'm sure you would have picked that up yourself :P
    Also, I would eliminate the second to last line as it seems really repatitve, but that's just me. If you think it adds to the poem then leave it.
    Overall this is a rather nice poem, a few finishing touches and it should be perfect! ^_^ It was a fun read and good write, keep writing keep smiling!

  • 18 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    Yea this is kinda what i'm saying in my poem " hidden feelings" i like yours too!

  • 18 years ago

    by ambika

    Emotional, i like it. good job!

    :) x

  • 18 years ago

    by Danielle

    I really liked your poem... I know how you feel. sometimes i feel the same way! Life's a game.. sometimes its unfair! I loved it.. keep it up!
    xoxox
    dAnielle

  • 18 years ago

    by cherish

    I like this alot..i think it has alot of meaning and can relate to alot of hurt people..
    love cherish

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