Contemplating Suicide

by enfant du tordu chagrin   Feb 14, 2006


So many things i wonder, about how death would be
I fear to pursue it in case i'm still not free
Though many find comfort in the thought of life again
I cannot face this life, and no way another ten

But sometimes it gets hard, to resist this ongoing urge
It would be so easy to give them call to sing my dirge
And I long for what i've desired, my infinite rest
i feel that i've have earned it, so long surviving this life's test

So many thoughts tempting, coursing through my brain,
And I have the Horseman's promise to release me from my pain
The pull inside remains, and I know it always will
But still i resist experiencing the last moment's sweet chill

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  • 18 years ago

    by Reasonless

    Andrew,

    One question: Do all you're poems rhyme?

    *Rhymes bug me personally...they seem to be forced about 80 % of the time, howver, you've done a great job on this particular poem=)*

    Subject matter, if you can find a teen that cannot relate to this poem at all I'll give you a gold star, these are very very important lol,

    *So many thoughts tempting, coursing through my brain,
    And I have the Horseman's promise to release me from my pain
    The pull inside remains, and I know it always will
    But still i resist experiencing the last moment's sweet chill*

    That utter hopelessness, and yet determination, i dont really know how to describe it lol, caught my eye, I've yet to see a poem put this subject in that context, well done=)

    Keep it up, Sorry my comments like long and nonsense, but those are the best kind right?

    Area to improve: ...Rhymes, play with some more structures, when you stick to one style to long you tend to get writers block faster in my experience=)

    Hope thats helps
    DA

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