by Val
Excellent, very well written with a lot of feeling |
by Larry
Hey, for instance -- you don't need to say inner beauty and then use the word beneath in the same stanza or the entire poem for that matter -- if you wrote "and see the beauty beneath this face" -- you are implying that you're talking about your inner beauty and don't need to say it -- e-mail me privately for more information on this poem. Would say more now but I'm really tired |