This was a little confusing.. are you trying to get revenge on someone? or are you trying to teach them to live by themselves.. i dont really understand.. this was a fair poem, the repitition you used worked as did the flow.. nice try 3/5

The repeition was alright but I'm a bit lost on the meaning. What you should do is let the poem flow naturally. It's the words coming from your pen or written on your keyboard not something you can just pull out of thin air and call it a poem.

Go into more detail about what you are trying to say, or close your eyes and just type and see what comes of it. A fair poem though.