Demon

Overall this poem was good, smooth, and with a great subject. Visual, emotoinal, it has all the bases of a good poem covered. There were a few less smooth parts, and the word part in the second stanza has been deformed into aprt. So you get a 4/5 from me.

Wonderful Girl...you are very talented...I can relate to every line in this poem except for the first three..Great Write...Joc

I think it was a wonderful poem. Keep writing, you have so much to say and I really hope you find peace within yourself soon, because there is a life out there for you. You don't have to hurt yourself to find that out either. Trust me. I know I can't say that I have been to a better place where I have gotten over how I deal with my pain but I know people who have and I believe that as we walk through this life we find our purpose and pain and depression is a huge obstacle that we run into but that leads us to a better place, that is what we need to believe to get us to the better place. I hope this makes sense. Take care and don't worry about the spelling i think that was rude and i didn't see anything wrong with your spelling, so ignore that part if you will please. you are an awesome writer because what matters when we write a poem is what we are writing, we are expressing ourselves and that is what matters. Take kare. paula

Beautifully written! watch the spelling though... but overall really great. keep up the good work!
~Sami