Woah....this is deep, although it doesn't really seem lyke it until the end. But then if you reread it, you get a whole new meaning from this poem. Great job and take care XXXXX
JL

The beginning is quite intrigueing, reading on I found this piece incredibly sad, it kinda seemed like the loss of childlike innocence at some points. The atmoshpere and tone of this is impressive, very nice work :)

Wow... kool poem, great use of words. 5/5