WAR

by XxFallenxFromxGracexX   Feb 17, 2006


I see you walking with your gun raised high
Screaming at me, every word spoken is just a lie
You call me names; try to make me feel low
But it wont work it just makes me hate you so
I hear shots fired, and my mates all scream
Your trying to break us up, destroy the team
Now I'm shouting things back at you,
Calling you stupid, and saying you smell to
Its immature and childish I know
But I'm scared; you and the rest of them scare me so
I look to my side and see my friend shot dead
He suddenly looks peaceful as if asleep in bed
I look at you, my jaw clenched tight
You've done it now, now we will fight
I charge at you, anger flaring on my face
You see me coming and you turn to-wards your base
"You killed my best friend, now you shall pay"
I heard myself shout, I heard myself say
"This is war you stupid man," he screamed
Then I heard bullets, past me they streamed
And I felt a hot rush in my chest,
You had won; you had proved you were the best
I sunk to my knees, red staining the ground
And then I died, without making a sound...

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  • 15 years ago

    by Steady Stereotype

    This poem began beautifully. A clear depiction, and then as it continued you added to this picture whilst creating a metaphoric sense that could be related to war as well as a day-to-day basis.

    The flow was great, and moments of this poem made my heart wrench.

    'Calling you stupid, and saying you smell to
    Its immature and childish I know
    But I'm scared; you and the rest of them scare me so'

    ^I loved these lines. It showed that you were trying to stay strong, screaming. Yelling. And yet you were really frightened, and you admitted that as well. This added a very human touch to this poem. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by TinyDancer46

    Omg! I don't even know what to say. This poem gave me chills up my spine! Wow, you are such an incredible writer... I loved the rhyming, the flow, the story...EVERYTHING. xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by dora

    A heartfelt p0em darl. great use 0f w0rds. thank u s0 much f0r the c0mments 0n my w0rk. meant al0t t0 me!

    l0ve always d0ra

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen

    So sad :(
    but a great poem