So sad :(
but a great poem

A heartfelt p0em darl. great use 0f w0rds. thank u s0 much f0r the c0mments 0n my w0rk. meant al0t t0 me!

l0ve always d0ra

Omg! I don't even know what to say. This poem gave me chills up my spine! Wow, you are such an incredible writer... I loved the rhyming, the flow, the story...EVERYTHING. xoxo

This poem began beautifully. A clear depiction, and then as it continued you added to this picture whilst creating a metaphoric sense that could be related to war as well as a day-to-day basis.

The flow was great, and moments of this poem made my heart wrench.

'Calling you stupid, and saying you smell to
Its immature and childish I know
But I'm scared; you and the rest of them scare me so'

^I loved these lines. It showed that you were trying to stay strong, screaming. Yelling. And yet you were really frightened, and you admitted that as well. This added a very human touch to this poem. 5/5