Watching the Clouds go By. . .

by holly   Feb 19, 2006


As I lay on the green grass,
people were all around
but i was in my own world
watching the clouds go by.

Watching the clouds go by,
thinking about my life.
and how your the only one who cares
nobody else understands.

But i can tell you everything,
your always willing to listen.
is stuff up all the time
but still you love me.

Thank you being there,
when everyone else had gone.
watching the clouds go by,
thinking about my life.

Thank you for being there
when i needed you most
thank you for always being here
and most of all thank you for loving me

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "and how your the only one who cares"
    you're, not your
    ~~~
    I wasn't entirely sure that the person you were talking to was a person at all. I mean, it totally could have been, but it could have been the sky, or the clouds, or something like that. That would have been cool.

    If I were to work on improving anything, it'd be setting up a bit stronger of a rhythm by making a more set syllable-per-line count. It can vary from line to line, but I'd suggest making it standardized from stanza to stanza

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Nice last stanza! ^_^ I liked this too. It was sweet. And the flow was good awswell. I also liked how you opened up the poem. Laying green grass. Very good imagry. Keep it up hun! 5/5

    .x.TaLeEe.x.

  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I def. feel this pome..keep it up ur GOOD.

    lissa

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    I really liked it excellent job keep it up.. 5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert

    Awesome poem. really sweet. very well written 2. well done

Read All Comments (7)

More Poems By holly