Nicely done! Sometimes they have to die. Forgiveness? Naw......God forgives....I love this poem.

Wow, this is so powerful, Simon! It's amazing the feelings you expressed so perfectly with only a few words. Excellent poem, I love it!

Wow, it's very deep and meaningful!
5/5 easily!
Take Care

Excellent poem! 5/5 I love the emotion behind the poem. A bit short though, I think it would've been even better if you had made it slightly longer but either way it's a great piece.

Awesome powerful write Simon...I love it ! Short and........direct...
Two thumbs up my friend ...

Awesome job Simon....powerful write...

love Ann

That is a really good poem

Short, dark, vengeful.

Sounds like you've been watching Kill Bill or something, or you've let Tarantino use your keyboard for a bit.

It feels like a showdown between two samurai warriors. but it could just as easily be two football hooligans about to fight outside a snack-van over the last pastie, armed only with their plastic cutlery.

'tis the magic of poetry ;o)

It is a good poem. I think there are a few stanzas that could be re-worded to flow easier...

*shrugs*

Good job though, it's nice, ^_^.

-Tony

I can think of a fair few people who should have this read to them... :P Really straight and evocative, cool :) x

Wow that was tough
loved it. tho its short but strong words ;)
keep it up

Wow...this poem is short...but extremely good. Good work!

Great poem

Good poem. Heh, I have a very similar poem. It's a great way to let out anger. Everything was perfect about this poem. It's flow and its format, but I think the imagery was cut a little short.

And:

"Any preference
How I take your life?
For causing
So much pain and strife!"

"For causing" takes everything out of flow. maybe if you get rid of so it will be better.

Very powerfull read, to hell with forgivness take them out lol
I really liked it thanx.
Tim

That was just incredible. It's odd b/c usually as I read poems such as those it scares me to think they would actually do something like that but this totally came across as figurative to me or at least not something you're actually threatening. Anyways, great job and I'm looking forward to reading more! 5/5
~Jules