by LadyPearl Feb 20, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Freestyle: no rhymes |
by J Lau
Love it! Great write! If I may suggest... to add more punch and impact to the prelude of the latter part of the poem, try breaking this line up "I'm someone I myself resent" into serveral lines like this... |
by NannO
Wow.. this is amazing.. i absolutely love every single word in this.. im sorry u feel this way.. but ur ryt about it.. someone is always hiding some deep truth about themselves.. ur title is also captivating, but i think "The Girl.." cud work more with the topic of ur poem than "This Girl".. gr8 job.. |
by MaSkEdSoUl
Yea I love this poem, its really good. |
by Loulou
This is good for a no ryhming poem great job hun |
by Allison
That was awsome. I loved it. Keep up the good work. *5/5* |