I dunno i though the poem over all that you got so far was really good. i dunno really how i would end it.

Awww...that's sad!! Great, but sad. I LOVE YOU KAYLA HUNNY!!! Love ya lots!!!!!!

Hey hun, great poem though the ending needs a bit more punch into it. its such an amazing idea though 'broken hearted me' LOVE IT.

Hey youre in my fav so i saw a new poem so looked it up...and its awesome!!
umm...the endings pretty good i think...maybe it could flow a little better...but its still fine :D dee
can ya chek out a few uv my new poems? i miis your comments...they make me smile :)

bye take care...dhaval