I have a brther that committed suicide...please...your life is worth so much more than that...email me if u like micellemybelle727@yahoo.com i'll be glad to help however i can....great poem..up til the end...:( michelle...take care

thanks for the reviews guys..... im starting to do a lil better, im just trying to think positive.. if u wanna email me feel free cr8zy28@hotmail.com... thanks... keep the comments coming n thanks for the support

Ok, first thing to do is edit this, remove the question marks that the server added, properly punctuate the poem and correct the simple spelling mistakes. For example:

The hurt just increases, worse than before

This will look, sound and feel better like this:

The hurt just increases, it's worse than before!

You're not following a set meter so addition and subtraction of words is easy to do.

I say this lot, but this is a solid first draft upon which you can build. Get to it!