WOW! That was great...uhg lol I cant seem to write poetry without rhyming...Im trying yet, I dont have enough inspiration and I always want to rhyme...but when i do, it sounds forced...GREAT JOB! :)

"The wristwatch keeps time
Only we lose it"

this is so beautifully written! what you say is so true - i think you have great talent!

keep up the good work!

shobhana

I really liked the images, very nice write!

Finally...

A poem that makes me think about things. Usually people are blunt and simple. But you make a good play of words, very good play. It's very captivating. The only part I didn't like is the first two lines of the first stanza. But maybe that's because of the sparkles and sunshine, lol. So, since that could be personally related I won't deduct anything from the perfect rating I'm giving you.

-Tony

Love your imagery... Nicely done! Very deep and profound. Not an easy subject, but you captured interest. Keep writing! 5/5

Loved the flow of this poem and it was really deep it got me thinking as I'm sure it does to all that read it .....great job

Yeah great poem. It has a wonderful flow, and it makes me wonder what exactly it's about, as it can fit under many different things. I was interested by the poem title, and the format of the poem is awesome. Great job.

That was a very interesting peice....... really makes you think about things rather than been blunt and to the point it makes the reader have to work. the writting itself is very good and the flow smooth.

5/5

Your work is excellent for a 14 year old, and it's great to see someone else from UK on here too.
I found this quite a meaningful poem. When I read it I got the impression of time passing away, and literally falling into oblivion. Obviously that interpretation came about by reading the title. I'm know this poem means much more, I'm just finding it difficult to describe what I think I read.
The final two lines were my favourite part of this poem, simply because the strength of mystery left me thinking, and wanting to read more.
Well done, keep writing.

Again a very cool view on a topic I haven't really thought too much about. I like your prospective and how you weave your thoughts into your poem so well. I also thought the title was very fitting and worked to really bring out the poem.

-Tainted Mikochan

"Where people felt yellow
And the sun was blue"

i absolutely loved that part! another very good poem. you're a great writer. 5/5

That really flowed :) Such a good poem - it just makes the reader want to fall into the poem :)

Peace. [Sole]

I love your style, its so unique, and leaves so much to the reader, and yet, still has its own meaning. great poem. this reminded me of something from peter pan lol

Another WOW poem, 5/5