Omigoodness... that was beautiful. I really mean it. thats an awesome way to get out the message of NOT drinking and driving... don't u hate it when ur like yay i'm so cool and then nobody comments on ur poems? they just leave a vote and don't explain it LOL... so I'm here telling u ur awesome and it was a really cool story and that I'm givin ya 5/5 because I liked it so much!!! *grins*

Omigoodness... that was beautiful. I really mean it. thats an awesome way to get out the message of NOT drinking and driving... don't u hate it when ur like yay i'm so cool and then nobody comments on ur poems? they just leave a vote and don't explain it LOL... so I'm here telling u ur awesome and it was a really cool story and that I'm givin ya 5/5 because I liked it so much!!! *grins*

Its great, so sad and meanigful, with a great message
well done
xxxxx

I really like how you use the weather to strengthen the emotions in the first verse. I've done that several times in my poetry. It's a really effective tool to use. As I read on, I was getting all teary eyed. Then a sigh of relief when I read it wasn't a true story. It's really good taking on another person's point of view. You have more options and a bigger playground for ideas. Awesome job.