This was my valentines day poem, I just never got around to putting it online. I hope everyone will enjoy it. You can view it in it's original form (with picture) at www.freewebs.com/honorsdomain/1.jpg

Thanks in advance for voting/commenting.

A touching write. I liked the use of repetition at the beginning of each stanza, and you used a lot of emotive words that brought the love in this poem alive. It seems to have quite an insecure tone, I think it was touching but quite sad. The only critisism I have is with a lengthy poem it can be difficult to keep the reader "gripped" and that was partly the problem I had with this poem. It's nothing major but maybe the use of more "creative" words could keep the reader reading intently.
Good job.

I'm sure this was a lovely valentines day present. You and I are somewhat similar as I too gave my Fiance a poem for Valentines day. It is title "Musings Of You" if you wish to read it.

GOSH, David this is reli amazing.. it was so heartfelt and sensational.. it made me feel all fuzzy inside.. some Valentines it mustve been ;) :P hope it was gr8.. i really love ur first two lines, they stood out... and ur last stanza, too.. but the first 2 are better :D.. one comment, tho.. i didnt reli lyk repeating the words just imagine.. i think it cudve been a lil better if ud have used other words instead or smthn.. but this is still some piece of art.. and i saw the picture.. it reli conveyed ur poem well..

gr8 job.. ur amazing
keep up the talent
Nouna

Great job! I think your choice of photography gave it the final touch and completes the package. It's a touching poem and nicely written. I liked the way how you turned the table around when you closed off the poem. Hoped everything worked out for you! 5/5

Wonderful write ... I'm sure you must have had a great Valentine's Day! Who wouldn't like to receive such a gift. Cheers!

Awww this was so sweet. I wish I had a guy give me a poem for vday.

Very sweet, i love it. the parallelism and imagery works really good, and the ending is awesome. nice job

Beautiful poem, I love how it flowed and everything. Good Job!

--~Take Care~

I'm going to add you to favorites because your poems really are some of the best I read. They just give you this intense emotional feeling.

Really outstanding poem, one of best i read so far here.
i just love it.

What a beautiful poem, true words spoken from the heart & soul.