Firstly, I love the title.
I think this is quite a descriptive write, and it certainly uses some original ideas.
On the second line it should be "what's."
I'm thinking how to give you the best possible critique that you could actually learn something from...so please excuse me if this comment is somewhat disorganised.
You use wonderful descriptions, however the poem needs tightening up, because as it stands it seems very wordy. It may help if you shortened the lines or split them up to improve the flow.
The use of "creative" words can boost a poem and allow the reader to be shown what's in the poem, rather than be told, and I think for a poem like this, using more visual words could improve the overall quality dramatically.
I did very much enjoy this poem, and with a bit of tweeking it could be a fantastic write that you should be proud of.
Keep writing.

Great poem. keep up the good work.

"Do you live your life in symphony? " Stunning last line, I like the imagery you were builiding up...not so sure about the structure perhaps could do with some tidying up here and there and there was a lil typo "stoppped" or was that for effect?

Nice stuff....
[lostlaureate - come find me]

I think you should cut the lines down and maybe reorganize them so they don't run on two lines for one thought (sentence)

Otherwise beautiful.