Grey under Blush

A very deep and thoughtful poem, I like your very unique ideas and expression. I do think that punctuation would help clarify the meaning, pronunciation and flow. You have a very individual style, continue to work at it and keep experimenting.

Excellent job. This poem holds a deep meaning about the journey of life to old age. You made the poem flow well which contributed to the poem overall. Keep it up

The thing that I admire so much in your poetry is the abstract language. It is obvious that you have a clear point to convey, but you leave so many thing up to interpretation and so many intimations to make their impression.

This piece seems classic to me. It seems like an observational piece, rather than a statement. I hate to try and pin point exactly what it is about, for fear of missing the message, but what I get from this piece is that there is always an inner child within, and although age bestows wisdom it does not rid us of that inner child. Also about how history builds up in us all and we may or may not want to learn from it or pass on that wisdom.

I love the use of words and the feelings it stirs. There seems to be so many points all ending in the same place, something so abstract coming together beautifully but not concisely enough to be certain or judge it.

Lovely job.