Great poem! I love it, specially the last stanza. Excellent work.

Hey Luke, this poem is very good, the flow and rhyme are great. A few filler words can be removed and it will flow better. You and I have been working on your poems in the club discussions..... we can keep working on them there and make our own thread or you can email me PetesLadyLove@hotmail.com. I would like to continue to work on this with you. You are a talented young man and will go far with your writing. Loved this poem........

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

On a roll here... Superb write!! The flow is very nice :)

Yeah i know what you mean

Yeah i know what you mean