Comments : Why Does It Hurt (Acrostic)

  • 18 years ago

    by ღ Dark Princess ღ

    Nice! Very good to be your first one.

  • 18 years ago

    by JENNY and KRISSY

    Great to be a first, keep writing and writing. always helps. writing feelings is a great way to get things out. and makes great poems and songs. kees it up.

  • 18 years ago

    by J Lau

    Great job! Out of the two that you did... I liked this one the best. Now your new challenge is to have a double Acrostic (not only the first letter, but ends with the same letter). Keep experimenting and keep writing. Well done! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Brigitte

    That was a great read! So simple short and sweet! I loved how you rapped up your poem at the end and i think it's really awesome that your trying a new way of writting! In a few places I found that your wording was a little funny... I'm not sure if you wanted it that way but this line kind of threw me off.

    Everything I do it hurts,

    I'd change that to "everything i do hurts" the way you have it now kinda throws of the flow a bit! Anyways, I loved this poem, 5/5 keep up the awesome work!