This is great - why did you stop? You can put so much more into this one... It is great though and if you like it as it is I understand... There is one that I could have written to be 50 stanzas long probably, but I liked it at 1 stanza... I really like this one and urge you to write some more :)

I agree with Simon! I'd love to see more, excellent start!

Yes I agree with the others Katie , such a great beginning , hoping to see more my friend ....
Take care Katie

I didn't read the previous version, but this is good. the elvis reference brought a smile to my face too.

hope you are feeling ok.

jay

I agree with the above ones but i still think this poem is good, its the best sad poem i've read today.
keep it up
xx

I agree with what all the other people have said here. it is a brilliant peice and think it could be expanded to be even better.

5/5

This is so brilliant everything I've ever believed in

Sondos

Wow,
I really enjoyed every word. So much detail, and you used great words that fitten in every place.
a very well written poem. i loved it.
Keep it up ! :)

Wow,
I really enjoyed every word. So much detail, and you used great words that fitted in every place.
a very well written poem. i loved it.
Keep it up ! :)

Wow its really good three words for it
{I} {L}{O}{V}{E} {I}{T}
Wow its really good three words for it
{I} {L}{O}{V}{E} {I}{T}

Awesome poem, I really liked how you brought in Elvis. A good song, and the lyrics are amazing. A very strong poem you have written, I really enjoyed every word of it.

A little sad but packed with emotion.
To loose a loved one no matter what the reason always leqaves a void we have a need to fill...