Stand By Me?

That is a awesome poem but i am sure peeps would still stand by you if you were the real you around them and if they didnt then there not true friends. and dont think about suicide i have but someone told me to look at all you have a think yourself lucky b/c others would die to have what you have! so keep up the good writing and ill keep reading. 5/5

These are the type of things that make up this little world...everyne gets so confuzzled with friendship. Excellent job!

I agree as far as format, verse would be better than the prose form. You can use verse/stanza to emphasize. But as far as content and emotion I do NOT find it repetetive. I think it's good. Go back and edit into Verse and see how YOU like it then. But I hear and feel your pain, as MANY will. It's a good poem keep Writing!! 4/5 Email if you like.

Okay....im not going to agree wiht that person up there...i think it is fine the way it is....i sooo know how you feel..im in the same position.....i love this poem....feel free to email me anytime!!!! GREAT JOB!!
Amanda

Okay. here I go.
I'm going to be honest. I'm not giving you a crap comment.

I do NOT like the format or flow of this poem. This is not a poem format, it is a poem, but it just seems like a block of text.

First of all, I don't think any text should hit the other side of the page, that's just overwhelming.

Recently, I have grown to realize, that punctuation, such as periods and commas, ruin the flow of the poem.

I would have preferred if the poem looked like this:

Would you stand by me
If I showed you the real me
Would you still be my friend
If I told you my true feelings

Would you still love me
Ifyou knew what I was thinking
These are the questions
I want to ask everyone the most
You see, everyone only sees
The happy, carefree, joke cracking Person I pretend to be.

If you saw my soul
A girl that cries for attention,
A girl that thinks about,
A girl, that wants to be anyone else,
Not who she is...
You would see the real me

All I want to know is
Would you still be able
to Stand By Me?

I hope this helps.

Secondly, this poem is very repetitive, I think some changes could be made, but that is up to you.

Lastly, it's very out in the open, it doesn't have any hidden meanings, the truth in it is all so obvious, it's not a mysterious type of poem thing. Mysterious poems show depth. You lack this here.

Good job.