Spelling errors it's not to that point as great but it's good keep up the good work

Yup, Its great, but I think that the rhythm needs to be looked at:

What happens is, as we get to the middle of the poem, the speed increases, everything is building up, it goes with the subject, but I feel we then loose this at the ending. Perhaps keep it till the last line and then release? And perhaps start the build of tension earlier?

Just my two cents.