Another poem that I used for p freshman poetry slam. Even though nominated,b ut didn't win for my clqass, this is the poem that did me in...so yah comment plz!

I love it michael! It invokes such emotion. 5/5 Great work!

I like your choice of words and the imagery they convey, the language is different from what i usually read on here. However I didn't really get any sense of lonelines from this until the last stanza, I think using the main idea more in the first two stanzas would make the piece more effective. That being said I still think this piece was written well and it is incredibly poetic, well done :)