That was real deep.I was really into it.You kept my attention.Keep up the good work....

~complexchild

Loved the storyline and description! You're so talented Darien! :) Can't wait for the summer when I come up there!

Oooh... chilling and dark... Great writing! You really were on a roll that day huh?! :)

Very creepy poem. I liked the tension and atmosphere you have created.

You have truly shown the consequences of cheating…This is a sad, dark poem showing a boy murdered and made to look like a suicide by his apparent girlfriend. Good poem Darien, you sure have talent.

This was an interesting poem. It does show the consequences of Ismail, but to a very extreme point. Suicide..might not always be the response to cheaters. Anyways, the flow and format was great, the ending was good too. It was a strong ending.

Hey really good job..i read a few of your poems but this one was my favourite ....i love the storyline and how you put a dark side in2 it...keep it up you are truly telented keep shining....and by the way you quotes
f u k en rule i love them and can relate
so yea with love always JoSiExoxo

Very dark poem, it had great emotion put into it. You did a great good on this one.

Well done nice poem thanx for commenting on mine
5/5 xoxo

Oh yesh, This was awesome too. Those last 3 stanza's really stood out the most I think, Wel to me they did.

But I loved it. A really great write. 5/5
I would rate higher for your poems.. but.. i cant. Tehe. Keep it up.

`taleeee xx