When I read this piece, it was very calm, the flow was very bouncy, but it fit so well with the poem. The pauses came in with the right words. It was excellent.

Hey your one quoat from Fall out boy it should be

Oh don\'t mind me I\'m watching you two from the closet
Wishing to be the friction in your jeans
Isn\'t it messed up how I\'m just dying to be him

I notice you quote Nietzshe, though you have a slightly different spin on it. Coolness.

I liked this. it is so original. The Flow was a little up and down, but other than that great job.

~Joe~

This is an excellent poem! I love it so much I can really relate to it, and alot of other people probaly can to.Btw Thanks alot for the advice you gave me, I will try that somehow. Keep up the good work! Cya
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*van.e.ssa*
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Very good, it had a good flow and rhythm! and it was very unique! keep up the good work!
jessy xox

Hey i really like this poem, it's very unique. i love the ending. the quote before the poem is great as well. keep up the good working, keep up your unique style.

~Jacklyn

For being such a sarcastic a..whole, I thought I would comment on a poem. It is the least I can do. And by the way, this poem is very good. It isn't fancy filled with words that I need a dictionary for. It was eloquent yet humble.

Great poem! i really liked it!

What a unique write. I like how the stanzas were... jumbled, if that's the correct word to use. They didn't have one set style, yet somehow, they all worked. They worked very well.

Excellent job.