Very descriptive and creative. Though I can't quite put it in the right way, it's seems to hold some kind of deep meaning. Great job

Though it's my opinion, I like poems to be separated into stanzas. It's just easier to read.

Firstly do any of your poems not have a 5? And if so what the hell were they thinking... You never cease to amaze me, each piece is a journey on its own, a ghostly plight in the footprints of your life. Uggh I wish I could write like you, with such passion and just saying enough to make sense, not too much and not too little. With just a few words dribbled across a page you create such a vivid understanding. In that short space you create such life, such pain, such pity, and such admiration. You truly have a gift, and I cant wait for the day your book comes out in the stores and I go to buy my copy. Just think when your gone in the end your spirit will live on in the words of your poems on everyones lips. O.k. now Im getting creepy. Anyway loved this one yet again past the point of critisism.

Well i have to say that i liked YOUR poem a lot... im just kidding i would like to thank you for actually criticizing and heloing me out. I appreciate it. Thanx
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