That was F**king awsome, i loved it!!!
keep it up!
Bam

Hey! wow that was so awesome! your really great @ poetry!!! thanx so much for commenting on one of my poems. i changed one of the words like you suggested. thanx heaps for that it sounds much betta. hehe! cya :)

Omg! wow! this is fantastic. the rhyming and the short lines really make for a quick and meaningful read. and it paints a intense picture. awesomeness!

Very good, 5/5