I like this poem a lot, i can relate to it,we all try n give all the we can to sum1 very foolishly. for sum constructive critisism woul dbe that in the end, u sumwat repeat urself about wanting forgivness and you trying to keep her smiling. other than that i liked it, especially cause i can relate to it!:)

Anton u must be stupid kid next timr read what uhave writen b4 u submit imbicile! LOL

Hey awsome poem :D, great job :P