Not in heaven

by silhouette fairy   Mar 6, 2006


At the grave
they all circle around
everyone knows the face
but no one knows the person
the name they've heard
no one murmurs a word
the tears show
no one knows why
the girl they knew
one life to never be retold
the outside showed happiness
but bitterness inside
such pain
and the happy cover
"sharpened knife
please take my life"
were often her words
when no one was around
now only a few grieve
and she will not be one
she is now happy
not in heaven
but deep in hell

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ariana

    This is a very depressing poem, I'm guessing you are writting with the idea that committing suicide equals hell? I like how you've showed this idea, usually poems on suicide conclude with the deceased being happy in heaven but I like how you bring to light the other viewpoint. I also like how you didn't feel the need to make it sound as if everything is okay in the end because obviously it doesn't always happen that way! I also like how you incorporated (sp? lol) other ideas into this, such as everyone coming to the funeral despite not really knowing person who has died on the inside. I think you should add a bit more punctuation to make it read easier. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Erika

    That's really sad, I didn't like the peoms, but it was well written...

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