A Silent scream
That cannot be heard
Lost in a dream
That can't be triggered
_____________________________________

My favorite part though I would have to agree with the person who said it sounded like a rape poem. It's about what the reader thinks too that makes poetry so good. Keep writing. I can tell already you're really good at it.

LOVED IT!!!... keep writting 5/5

I liked the contrast used in the first stanza, a good strong beginning and my favourite stanza of the entire poem. The stanzas 2 to 5 used good descriptions and emotive images. The sixth stanza I wasn’t keen on because it was very short, twelve words in total, and on line two there is only one word! The final stanza is ok, lines one to three are good but the final line is a very over used idea. I would suggest you reword it for the sake of the rest of the poem (which is very good.) Overall I enjoyed this poem (especially the beginning.)

Wicked poem its really good
keep it up

allana
xoxo

Incredible! i know exactly what you mean. keep writing!

I love this so much!!!!
keep up the great work
Ris

Wow thats a really good poem. i really like it:)

Good stuff. i know how you feel. comment on mine....

natalie

Wow. It hit home. I wish I could write as good as that. don't stop writing, you've got a gift for it.

I like it.. its not too wordy which doesnt bother me but idk.. seems like its misssing somethin.g

~David

Wow, amazing Job. This was very well written. You know how to keep the reader interested.

~Joe~

I loved this one Nat! It was so good :)

And lucky u.. you have a poem that has lots of comments and votes and all :( lol

Hehe nice poem :P

Wwoww.. what a powerful write! it really moved me and the emotion was just so strong.. the words you used were excellent and the flow really worked.. and the rhymes didn't have any faults as far as i can see.. in the sixth stanza though, i was just wondering if "anymore" should be lower case? because the rest of the poems first letters of every line is capitalized.. lol.. just checking! 5/5!

I like this poem! There's just something about it's deep simplicity, if you don't mind the oxymoron, that catches my eye and my heart.

RAve

Wow. Lots of emotion for someone who's seriously over tired and needs sleep lol. I love it though. Even though it's one you basically wrote first lol. I liked the flow, and loads of emotion. Good job. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha