Oh wow, This is really. I love it! I like how you repeated that same verse! It was really good. Great job 5/5 =]

- natz x-x

p.s Thanx heaps for the comment mwahz x-x-x

Great write! I like it... keep writing... 5/5

Hey there, first off i've gotta say this poem really made me think. I read it twice and it felt as though I could relate to some of it. Anyways wonderfully done, your flow was consistant as well as your punctuation. Also I really liked the use of your vocabulary, it actually made sense in you write.

Its weird sometimes when I read a poem, they try and use these big words yet they make no sense in that context. Anyways i'm rambling. The part I would have to say I liked the best is:

"I just couldn't force myself to see,
a higher road that could be before me.
I was too great a sinner, too chained to be free,
so sure that no road could lead me to liberty."

That was just woah; full of emotiona nd meaning. Sometimes I feel exactly like those lines. Its like i've gone to deep and done to many wrong things that I can never pull myself back up and right my wrongs. Well said.

So in all you definatly deserve a 5/5 on this poem, its wonderful. Keep up the awesome work! =D

Take Care.

~Luvz~
~Angie~
xoxo

Omg you are a brilliant writer! 5/5 on every poem!

Omg you are a brilliant writer! 5/5 on every poem!

Overall an emotive poem, you put great power and emotion into your words, and made me FEEL rather than telling me, which is what a great poem should do, well done. I liked the story you told and you told it fluently, which is good also. I admit you could use more creative words, to take the originality side of this poem further, because I'm sure you’re aware it is on a very overused subject.
The flow from one stanza to the next changes, and I kept stumbling over the words because the flow and rhythm had changed. Suggestion for how to make the flow change less dramatic: check the syllable count, a dramatic change can take the flow way off. You don’t have to write the poem to a strict count, just check that one line isn't 10 and the following 5 and so on... I liked the last stanza very much, had a good strong ending. Keep writing.

I thought this poem was excellent. The rhymes had rhythm and it had great feeling, too. 5/5, great job!

-DJ

I Tried To Vote 5.0 Twice But They Wouldn't Let Me! :( ...Wow I'm Speechless & I'm Honored To Even Be Reading Your Work, Your a Great Writer...I Loved It I Can't Seem To Find a Flaw...Just Sweet Simplicity 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

I didn't feel to much emotion in it and it sometimes felt like it was a little to wordy in some parts. But I still liked the whole meaning behind it.

~Retniapdoolb

When a poem paints a picture mentally you have done you do... I feel you...

Wow this is a wongerful poem i loved it keep up the good work 5/5

Wow. Again. Great job well done! I loved how you kept repeating that same stanza over and over again. It was great! 5/5

luv natalie

Wow, that was an excellent poem. The repetition was amazing, and so was the wording.

"Comprehension has come far too late,
for now I see my greatest mistake.
I had endevered to make my life through,
I had thought of leaving without you."

That last stanza ended the poem beautifully. I can't explain perfection in any more words.

5/5, keep it up.

Sarah